peer review

       I read Chantelle's poem analysis, and she chooses the poem is Baby's World. Baby's World is written by Rabindranath Tagore. The poem is like just like its name, because it describes a Utopian world. The poem is soft and easy makes people feel comfortable just like lie into a cradle. In her first paragraph she did a great job at to describe her poem. She used many adjective words to the poem, and she makes connection with real life. Also she pointed out the reason why this poem is different with normal poem. In the second paragraph she wrote about the some deep meaning of the poem, and she did a good job on this part. She contains many information and some guesses to describe the deep meaning of the poem. I think her third paragraph is the best, because she explained every sentences of the poem. Also she wrote about her understanding of the poem. In my opinion this part is her best part. In her analysis she focused on the meaning of the poem, and in her explanation parts everything is specific and accurate. She also wrote about the rhythm scheme of the poem. However the analysis still has some part can be improved, such as grammar mistakes.

       There have many grammar mistakes in her analysis. The past tense is the biggest part, for example "The writer uses baby as a significant figure of innocent, clear, and cute." In this sentence the word "use" should be in past tense. Also there are some sentences make me confusion "Reading this poem makes me remember my childhood when I had to trouble, and no pressure."and "He never needs to worry friends leave him because stars are always with him." These sentences might have some grammar mistakes. I think the grammar is not the most important problem on her essay. In her first paragraph I can not to find the thesis statement in her first paragraph. Thesis statement is one of the most important things of an essay, because if without thesis the reader can not understand what the author wanted to say. Also in her first paragraph is not very attractive enough, so when I first time read her first paragraph it did not attract me attention. The last problem is her conclusion. The conclusion is too short to conclude this essay, because two sentences can not conclude her essay. I think her might can to use the connection of her life or her experience to conclude the whole analysis, because this can make her analysis become more interesting. After all she wrote a good analysis for her poem the Baby’s World.

        In conclusion, her analysis is really good. I think her two body paragraphs are the best parts of her analysis, so I think she can makes the thesis statement based on her body paragraphs. For the grammar just be careful on the tense. After all the most parts of this essay are perfect, so just add a strong thesis on the first paragraph and more sentences on conclusion.